Peer Editing Worksheet

1. Does the essay have a clearly stated thesis if so what is it?

Out of two of the most commonly sought out websites for anxiety and depression, the Anxiety and Depression Association of America website (ADAA) is more effective than the Everyday health website.

2. What two things are being compared? What basis for comparison exists between the two?

a website built and sponsored by the ADAA versus a more commercial general health website. The basis of comparison is simply the quality and usefulness of the sites comparing information and accessibility.

3. Does the essay treat the same or similar points for each of its two subjects? List the points discussed.

ADAA

a. Information (personable and professional)

b. Available resources (tests and actual mental health professionals)

c. Comes off overall more professional and legitimate

d. All research and sources have legitimate state and commercial sponsors

Everyday Health

a. Information (just symptoms and quick how to's)

b. As said just symptoms of things( no professional backing from and state or commercial sponsors)

c. Cookie Cutter feelings aka the pick and stick program since you're not actually speaking to a mental health professional.

d. Resources are pulled from WebMD and style blogs. Blanket one solution may cover all leads to misdiagnosis or worse by attempting or encouraging self diagnosis.

4. Does the essay use a point by point or subject by subject strategy? is this the best choice? Why?

point by point  is used for this topic and I believe that's the best choice for this topic. When talking about something that's as important as mental health and especially when discussing possible solutions or potential points of interest it needs to be broken down point by point. Professionals in the medical field know that one doesn't cover all so focusing on the larger theme overall sometimes doesn't help and you got to get gritty.

5. Are transitional words and phrases used appropriately to identify points of comparison and contrast? List some of the transitions used.

It's nice to see many different resources such as ideas on how to cope, but especially when it comes to depression it is such a health issue where you should consults medical attention instead of reading advice off the internet.

6. Everything seems clear enough to me

7. Introduction instantly got to the point with no ramblings or middle ground took a side and conveyed it.

8. the conclusion was well done also the whole paper lead up to his opinion and there wasn't any faltering in his side,clear reemphasis of the thesis.